六級高分作文_節(jié)約用電
節(jié)約用電
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled On Saving Electricity . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words according to the following guidelines:
Energy demand is ever-increasing as world population grows.
Household electricity accounts for a considerable fraction of world power and saving household electricity is significant for energy saving.
To save electricity we should...
審題立意
1. 導語解讀：要求考生根據(jù)給定的提綱就“節(jié)約用電”這一話題進行闡述，并論述如何節(jié)約用電。
2. 文章立意：世界人口的激增造成了各種能源短缺，家庭用電需求不斷增強，因而節(jié)約能源意義重大。
寫作思路
1. 第一段點明主題，即隨著世界人口的增加，對資源的需求日益增加，引出電力短缺的問題。
2. 第二段通過詳細分析，闡明電力短缺產生的主要原因，同時指出這一問題的緊迫性。
3. 第三段由淺及深，提出具體的解決辦法。
參考范文
On Saving Electricity
As world population grows, the energy demand is ever-increasing. And the lack of electricity is particularly conspicuous. 1
As household electricity accounts for a considerable fraction of electricity consumption, saving household electricity is significant for energy saving. 2 However, the excessive using of industrial and urban household electricity, the lack of traditional raw material to generate electricity and the waste contribute to the lack of electricity. The problem needs to be settled instantly. Electricity is precious and we should save it not only for us, but also for our offsprings.
To save electricity, initially 3 , we should raise awareness of saving electricity like reducing the using of electric lamp when unnecessary and turning off lights when leaving. Then call on more friends and family members to do so. Furthermore 3 , use energy saving lamps as much as possible, which will make a great contribution to energy saving. Last 3 , it should be encouraged to take advantage of more environmentally friendly raw material to generate electricity by government, which has less pollution to the environment.
節(jié)約用電
隨著世界人口的增加，對能源的需求也在不斷增長。電力短缺是一個相當引人關注的問題。
因為家庭用電占電力消耗中很大的一部分，所以節(jié)約家庭用電對節(jié)約能源意義重大。然而，工業(yè)和城市家庭的過度用電，傳統(tǒng)發(fā)電原料的短缺，浪費等原因造成了用電的短缺。這一問題亟待解決。電是寶貴的資源，我們應該節(jié)約用電,這么做不僅僅是為了我們自己，也是為了我們的子孫后代。
要節(jié)約用電，首先我們應該提高節(jié)約用電的意識，比如，在不需要的時候不開燈，用完后隨手關燈。然后，號召更多親戚朋友一起這樣做。其次，盡可能多地使用節(jié)能燈，這對節(jié)約能源會極為有利。最后，政府應該鼓勵使用更環(huán)保的原料發(fā)電，這對環(huán)境造成的污染會更小。
范文點評
1. 開篇直接按照提綱第一點來寫，簡明扼要。
2. 自然過渡，根據(jù)提綱第二點內容，闡明電力短缺產生的主要原因，并指出這一問題亟待解決的緊迫性。
3. 末段按照提綱第三點，分三個層次闡述如何節(jié)約用電。
要點用法
ever-increasing adj. 不斷增長的
conspicuous adj. 引人注目的
considerable adj. 相當可觀的
fraction n. 部分
raw material 原材料
offspring n. 子孫后代
awareness n. 意識
contribute to 造成，促成；有利于
句法點評
1. As household electricity accounts for a considerable fraction of electricity consumption, saving household electricity is significant for energy saving.
此為as引導的原因狀語從句，表原因。
2. Electricity is precious and we should save it not only for us, but also for our offsprings.
句中not only...but also...結構的使用，增強語氣的同時，豐富了文章的句式結構。
