六級高分作文_App的泛濫
App的泛濫
Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief description of the impact of flooding apps of smart phones on their users and then explain the advantages and disadvantages of numerous smart phone apps . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.
審題立意
1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生根據(jù)漫畫內(nèi)容就“手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序”這一話題進(jìn)行描述，并分析智能手機(jī)上應(yīng)用程序的利弊。
2. 漫畫解讀：圖片上的兩個人正在聊天。由下面注解文字可知，他們說的是手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序泛濫的現(xiàn)象。女士說，手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序確實(shí)能夠做到很多不可思議的事情，但是它卻做不到通過遙控的方式清理貓砂（即貓廁）。這顯然用戲謔的手法反映出人們過分依賴手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序的現(xiàn)實(shí)。
3. 文章立意：手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序能給人們的生活帶來許多新奇的東西，但是它們不是萬能的。因此，在享受手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序所帶來的新奇的同時，也不要因?yàn)槭謾C(jī)應(yīng)用程序而忽略掉真實(shí)生活中的一切。
寫作思路
1. 第一段簡要描述漫畫及注解文字，說明圖片的深層含義。
2. 第二段通過正反兩面描述，對比手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序給人們生活帶來的利弊。
3. 第三段得出結(jié)論：享受手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序帶來的好處的同時，也需要保持清醒。
參考范文
As is depicted in the picture, a woman talks to a man, complaining of the weak points of apps. The picture intends to warn people that people should treat apps appropriately and not be overly dependent on them. 1
Just as every coin has two sides, there is no exception for mobile apps. 2 On the one hand 3 , it is convenient for smart phone users to have so many apps. They can do numerous things when their mobile phones are connected to the Internet: go shopping, chat with their friends, receive emails, have video conference, read e-books, watch films, etc. On the other hand 3 , the negative effects caused by apps can’t be overlooked. Firstly 4 , some apps may lead to message leakage, which is dangerous for the users. Secondly 4 , overuse of smart phones can be harmful to one’s physical and mental health. Last but not least 4 , over-reliance on apps may make people indulge in the virtual world, isolating people from the outside world, and leading people to ignore everything around them.
To conclude, mobile apps should be utilized wisely. While enjoying the convenience of apps we should stay awake and avoid being caught in a virtual world. 5
如圖所示，一位女士正在向一位男士抱怨手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序的美中不足之處。這幅漫畫的寓意在于提醒人們要正確對待手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序，不要過度依賴它們。
正如任何事物都有兩面性一樣，手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序也不例外。一方面，眾多的手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序會給智能手機(jī)使用者帶來方便。在他們的手機(jī)連接互聯(lián)網(wǎng)后，他們可以做大量的事情：購物、與朋友聊天、收郵件、開視頻會議、閱讀電子書、看電影等。另一方面，不能忽視手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序的負(fù)面影響。首先，有一些手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序可能會導(dǎo)致信息泄露，這對手機(jī)用戶來說是很危險的。其次，過度使用智能手機(jī)對人的身心健康都有危害。最后但同等重要的是，過度依賴手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序可能會讓人們沉迷于虛擬的世界，與外界脫節(jié)，忽視身邊所有的一切。
總之，應(yīng)該明智地使用手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序。在享受它帶來的便利的同時，人們也應(yīng)該保持清醒，避免陷入一個虛幻的世界。
范文點(diǎn)評
1. 開篇簡要描述圖片并說明其潛在寓意，暗含手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序泛濫給人們帶來的影響。
2. 承上啟下，自然過渡，引出手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序的利與弊。
3. 從正反兩個方面對手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序的利與弊進(jìn)行論證。
4. 分三層論證手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序可能帶來的弊端。
5. 末段對文章進(jìn)行總結(jié)：享受手機(jī)應(yīng)用程序帶來便利的同時，不應(yīng)該沉迷于虛幻世界。
要點(diǎn)用法
complain v. 抱怨；控訴
intend v. 打算；想要
appropriately adj. 適當(dāng)?shù)?/p>
overlook v. 忽略
leakage n. 泄露
over-reliance n. 過度信賴
indulge in 沉溺于
isolate v. 使隔離；使孤立
be caught in 陷入
virtual adj. 虛擬的；事實(shí)上的
句法點(diǎn)評
1. Firstly, some apps may lead to message leakage, which is dangerous for the users.
本句中，which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句。which指代前面提到的整個句子，即一些應(yīng)用程序可能導(dǎo)致信息泄露。
2. To conclude, mobile apps should be utilized wisely.
to conclude是作結(jié)論時的用語，以結(jié)束全文，意為“總之”，相當(dāng)于in a word或in summary等。
