2017年4月托福寫作真題回憶及范文賞析(一)

　　綜合

　　Topic ： the reason of collapse of Akkadine Empire 討論曾經(jīng)很繁榮的Akkad Kingdom 覆滅原因。

　　閱讀：給出帝國(guó)覆滅的三個(gè)原因。

　　1. 征服地區(qū)人民頻繁反抗、起義，傷了帝國(guó)根基。

　　2. 閱讀分論點(diǎn)2- 降水少導(dǎo)致農(nóng)耕受影響，沒(méi)有充足食物供給(enough food supply) 。

　　3. 閱讀分論點(diǎn)3- 帝國(guó)很霸道，總是企圖控制貿(mào)易(聽(tīng)力中稱為unfair trade) ，并且把自己的條件強(qiáng)加給其他國(guó)家，引起周邊國(guó)家不滿甚至導(dǎo)致了幾十個(gè)外國(guó)國(guó)王對(duì)其宣戰(zhàn)。舉例海戰(zhàn)。

　　聽(tīng)力：閱讀三個(gè)原因都沒(méi)有說(shuō)服力。

　　1. 征服地區(qū)的城墻被征服拆了，起義軍沒(méi)有城墻保護(hù)很容易會(huì)被政府軍鎮(zhèn)壓。

　　2. 糧食并不短缺，農(nóng)耕技術(shù)很先進(jìn)，甚至掌握灌溉技術(shù)( irrigation) ，北方缺水能從別的地區(qū)引水。并且知道存儲(chǔ)糧食(store grain)

　　3. 聽(tīng)力分論點(diǎn)3- 海戰(zhàn)是真實(shí)的，雖然和一些國(guó)家會(huì)有摩擦，但戰(zhàn)后新的機(jī)會(huì)和資源都會(huì)變多，彌補(bǔ)(make up) 損失。

　　Sample Answer:

　　Regarding the collapse of Akkad Kingdom which once experienced prosperity, the reading puts forward three reasons. Yet, all of them are contradicted by the listening with the following illustrations.

　　Frist, in the author?s point of view, the frequent revolt from the conquered areas damaged the kingdom. The listening, on the other hand, argues that in the conquered areas, the rampart was torn down, which makes it easy for the government army to suppress them because they were under no protection.

　　When it comes to insufficient food supply being attributed to the damage on farming caused by less precipitation, the listening is totally in disagreement with this point in the reading. The listening states that actually they did not suffer food shortage. Their cultivation skills were quite advanced and they even mastered irrigation skills. If the northern area encountered the lack of water, it could take water from other areas. What?s more, they had the insight of storing grain.

　　The last point raised by the reading material is that the unfair trade imposed by Akkad Kingdom on other countries stirred wars such as naval battle. This is also refuted by the listening which mentions that it is true that naval battle did happen. But despite of the conflict with other countries, Akkad Kingdom was exposed to more chances and resources after the battle, which could compensate for the losses.(228 words)

　　獨(dú)立

　　You have long been friend with someone. If they do something that you don ’ t like , should you still be friends with him or her ?

　　Sample Answer:

　　First and foremost, a long-lasting friendship usually based on common interests and

　　values will not andFriends are those who would like to unconditionally offer us both physical and emotional support. For this reason, friends for years are as precious as jewels in our life that deserve our cherishing. Even though my friends, especially those old ones, may sometimes do something that I dislike, I would definitely continue our friendship without hesitation.

　　First and foremost, a long-lasting friendship usually based on common interests and values will not and should not be disrupted by trivial things. As a proverb goes in China, people having shared hobbies and values always form a solid circle of friends. That denotes friends staying by my side are congenial with me who enjoy what I am fond of, who focus on what I am dedicated to and who stick to what I persist in. Through years of communicating and interacting, our friendship is successfully built and well-maintained. Hence, it is irrational and unreasonable for temporary conflicts to tear us apart. Speaking of my younger female cousin, the most intimate friend that I have, she is always leaving important things behind when we hang out, the most annoying thing for me that never fail to stir a quarrel. Rather than becoming estranged from her, I gradually regard this habit of hers as a natural thing due to the awareness of the deep love for her deriving from years of being accompanied and mutual support.

　　Besides, from the angle of individual development, being tolerant of our friends contributes to a better adaptability to the modern society with complex interpersonal relationship. To put it more clearly, modern society is a big network of relationships. On most occasions, handling practical problems related to daily work equals to relating with others. Therefore, it should not be surprising that those who are proficient in effective communication manage the skill of how to collaborate well with others. And an objectively treatment and pleased embracing of the things done by our friends which we do not like symbolizes the gaining of the knowledge of how to relate well with others. Again I would like to take myself as an example. By tolerating my younger female cousin?s drawbacks, I, after stepping into the work field, make it to get rid of negative state of mind when it comes to the encounter with carelessness of my colleagues or customers. As a result, they are all willing to cooperate with me when assignment comes.

　　To put it in a nutshell, it is more favorable for me to maintain the friendship with those who may behave improperly sometimes but join my life for years.

　　(430 words)