高中英語(yǔ)作文|書(shū)籍的重要性

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The importance of book
That we leave books is like the fish leaves water[1]. So[2] there's no denying that book is of significance in our life, being a part of us.
We all need books to shape our characters widen our horizon and make us more knowledgeable and skilled[3]. Furthermore, we can acquire happiness and relax from books[4]. From another perspective, we are in an age full of fierce competition. So[5] we have to equip our brain with all kinds of books to stand out from others and also make more contributions to society.
So[6] I hope, sincerely, that we can get along well with books, treating them as our good friends, loving them, valuing them.

修改意見(jiàn)：
[1] 此處應(yīng)注意 like 是介詞，如果后面接賓語(yǔ)從句要加 it 做形式賓語(yǔ)在加 that 從句，that 不能省略。That we leave books is like it that the fish leaves water. 這句話確實(shí)很別扭，而且不符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣，所以不建議使用。
建議改法：(1) Books are to people what water is to fish.
　(2) People without books are like fish without water.
另外，比喻時(shí)應(yīng)注意喻體的選擇。此處魚(yú)沒(méi)水就不能活，人沒(méi)了水最多也就是精神空虛。
[2] 此句只有So引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句，而不見(jiàn)主句。 建議改法：在So前加上逗號(hào)，使之成為副詞用法。
[3] shape our characters widen our horizon and make us more knowledgeable and skilled. 此處很明顯是三個(gè)動(dòng)詞短語(yǔ)的并列，但中間少了逗號(hào)，導(dǎo)致句意發(fā)生偏離。建議改法：shape our characters, widen our horizon and make us more knowledgeable and skilled.
[4] we can acquire happiness and relax from books. 這里是 and 并列兩個(gè)謂語(yǔ)，所以前后要注意對(duì)稱。建議改法：We can acquire happiness and relax ourselves with books.
[5] 此處跟第二處是同樣的錯(cuò)誤，為了避免重復(fù)，建議換個(gè)句式。比如，用非限定性定語(yǔ)從句引起銜接就非常合適。建議改法：... fierce competition, which make it necessary for us to equip our brain with all kinds of books to stand out from others and also make more contributions to the society.
[6] 此處So是口語(yǔ)中的語(yǔ)氣詞，建議不要用于書(shū)面語(yǔ)。建議改法：去掉so

點(diǎn)評(píng)：18分，這是一篇本該在最高檔次的文章，但 “開(kāi)篇不利”及簡(jiǎn)單詞 "so" 的反復(fù)不正確的使用影響了文章的整體美感，讓它失去了本該屬于它的位置。另外，論述的內(nèi)容有些單薄乏力。稍微充實(shí)更佳。