托福寫作避免語法結構錯誤扣分實例分析
選擇合適的語法結構可以使句子意思的表達更為精確和簡練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要,但選擇最恰當?shù)恼Z法結構仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下原則是在考慮選擇何種語法結構時可以參考的原則:
1. 一個句子的主語和謂語動詞應該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如:
The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.
從意思上來分析,上面這句話需要表達的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表達這個概念時,原句用的主語是situation,謂語動詞是was,不能強調(diào)需要表達的重點概念,可以改為下面這句話:My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.
2. 避免頻繁使用“there be”結構,例如下面的句子:
There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.
可以改為:My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.
更簡潔的句式為:My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.
3. 把從句改為短語或單詞。例如:
Dairy cows were raised on the farm,which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.
簡介的表達方式為:The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers tothe nearest university.
4. 僅在需要強調(diào)賓語而不是主語的時候,才使用被動語態(tài)。例如:
In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family.
本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被動語態(tài)后,仿佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達方式是主動語態(tài),相對來說更簡潔一些:In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.
5. 用更為精確的一個動詞來代替動詞短語,例如下面這句話:
My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.
Stand around doing nothing其實可以用一個動詞來表達,即loiter:My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends.
6. 有時兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達,例如:
Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.
兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子:Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree.
通過以上這些例子,相信大家也能夠看出托福寫作語法結構扣分的常見情況了,掌握了正確的語法結構使用方法,相信大家也可以寫出更好的文章拿到高分。