托福寫(xiě)作如何避免出現(xiàn)中式英語(yǔ)

　　其實(shí)中式英語(yǔ)是很多中國(guó)考生的通病，那么在托福寫(xiě)作，出現(xiàn)這樣的英語(yǔ)句子，勢(shì)必會(huì)影響我們的寫(xiě)作分?jǐn)?shù)的。那么我們應(yīng)該如何避免這種情況的發(fā)生呢?本文為大家整理了一些方法，供大家參考。

　　1、Original: If we agree to say that school offers us the best book knowledge acquisition then our society offers us the best surviving techniques in a hard way.

　　Revised: If we agree that school offers the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge, then our society offers us the best method for acquiring common sense or “street smarts”.

　　Agree to say that表達(dá)中式化，只需要agree that即可;the best book knowledge acquisition改為the best method for the acquisition of book knowledge(學(xué)校給我們提供了獲取書(shū)本知識(shí)的最好方法)更為恰當(dāng) ，同樣后面的the best surviving techniques改為the best method for acquiring common sense,加上street marks(街頭智慧)給文章的托福詞匯增添色彩。

　　2、Original: They can spend more time studying education and communication to improve their role as a mother, wife and daughter.

　　Revised: They can also decide to spend more time studying, education themselves, in order to improve themselves in their roles as mothers, wives and daughters.

　　原句中studying education and communication的說(shuō)法中式化，不符合英語(yǔ)的表述，應(yīng)該為studying，educating themselves。除了詞語(yǔ)表達(dá)，此句中還存在其他問(wèn)題，如名詞單復(fù)數(shù)的使用：不是提高他們的角色，而是提高他們自身以扮演好母親角色。

　　還有，女性不止一個(gè)人。很多人都在扮演母親角色，role和mother應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)，故將improve their role as a mother改為improve themselves in their roles as mother;同樣，為保持一致，wife和daughter也可用復(fù)數(shù)，原文中wife的復(fù)數(shù)寫(xiě)法有誤，應(yīng)該是wives。

　　3、Original：If you can get the point of communication by watching TV，will you...?

　　Revised：If one can learn about communicating from television，will you...?

　　原句的get the point of communication by watching TV表達(dá)不清，讓人難以理解，應(yīng)該是指“從電視上學(xué)習(xí)交際”：learn about communicating from television.