托福寫(xiě)作中的扣分點(diǎn)解析

　　學(xué)生們寫(xiě)的托福作文里或多或少都會(huì)有一些用詞不當(dāng)?shù)膯?wèn)題，但是要注意的是一些最最基本的錯(cuò)誤是不能犯的。

　　• In the show， if participators answer twenty problems that the host mentioned correctly，

　　they will get five hundreds thousand U.S. dollars as a prize.

　　——problems應(yīng)改為questions

　　2、新托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤

　　這里的拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤不是指在考試時(shí)候的誤打，而是本身對(duì)詞匯拼寫(xiě)記憶的錯(cuò)誤。

　　• In conclusion， issue of whether parents are the best teachers is a complex one， requiring

　　subjective judgement， consequently， there are no easy or certain answers.

　　——judgement應(yīng)改為judgment

　　3、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之亂用大詞

　　First of all， children can earn money from their jobs， although there isn’t too much，

　　but they will keep their salary gingerliness.

　　這里的gingerliness根本是不知所云。該句子還有以下問(wèn)題：

　　1)該作文題目是講學(xué)生是否應(yīng)該做兼職，因此children的出現(xiàn)就顯得很莫名其妙;

　　2)although和but是不能連用的;

　　3)指代不明，they不知道是指代前面的什么;

　　4、新托福作文扣分點(diǎn)之表達(dá)中式

　　The second argument-it might have been noticed by others-is that in some occasion， it is quite difficult to compare parents to teachers because

　　parents are a kind of people， teachers are a kind of vocation.

　　句子中劃線(xiàn)部分的表達(dá)過(guò)于中式化。

　　5、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之表意重復(fù)

　　•They shocked their friends， devastated their families， crushed their best friends.

　　前面已經(jīng)提到了朋友，后面又提到朋友。

　　• The show is so compelling but attractive.

　　•compelling和attractive是同義詞，所以這里這么寫(xiě)就讓人不明白。

　　6、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之固定用法錯(cuò)誤

　　• To some extends， I agree with the author’s general assertion that if parents

　　also have a comprehensive sense of professional knowledge.

　　——To some extends應(yīng)改為T(mén)o some extent

　　7、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之例證夸張

　　• For example， when a doctor faces a patient who has got cancer， the doctor

　　cannot tell the truth， for the truth may cause the patient’s immediate death.

　　雖然善意的謊言是必要的，但是其功效顯然沒(méi)有這么大。

　　8、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之成分多余

　　• According to a comprehensive investigation which is carried out by Chinese

　　Academy of Social Sciences shows that there is an increase in the number of

　　university students who are taking part-time jobs.

　　該句中的shows that是多余的成分。

　　9、托福寫(xiě)作扣分點(diǎn)之詞性混亂

　　• However， the questions such as "Have you ever regretted marrying your

　　husband" may be very privacy and embarrassingly.

　　句子中的privacy和embarrassingly應(yīng)該改成private和embarrassing。

　　希望通過(guò)上面的新托福作文扣分點(diǎn)總結(jié)自己的失分點(diǎn)在那，多加注意，在托福寫(xiě)作備考中克服。