前考官雅思寫作大作文范文匯總：罪犯告訴青少年不要犯罪

　　題目：

　　Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime.

　　To what extent do you agree or disagree?

　　有些人進了號子之后放出來就變乖了，一些人覺得他們這伙人是最適合去給懵懂少年現(xiàn)身說法的。多大程度上同意還是不同意?

　　考官范文：

　　1.開頭段：完全同意題目的觀點

　　It is true that ex-prisoners can become normal, productive members of society. I completely agree with the idea that allowing such people to speak to teenagers about their experiences is the best way to discourage them from breaking the law.

　　講真有犯罪前科的前科的人是可以變成有益于社會的。我完全同意讓他們?nèi)ソo懵懂少年現(xiàn)身說法的主意，這是一種警示他們不要觸犯法律的好辦法。

　　2.主體段：(第一個理由)：犯人可以告訴青少年他們真實的犯罪經(jīng)歷。年輕人會相信并被這些真實的故事所震懾，然后舉例子

　　In my opinion, teenagers are more likely to accept advice from someone who can speak from experience. Reformed offenders can tell young people about how they became involved in crime, the dangers of a criminal lifestyle, and what life in prison is really like. They can also dispel any ideas that teenagers may have about criminals leading glamorous lives. While adolescents are often indifferent to the guidance given by older people, I imagine that most of them would be extremely keen to hear the stories of an ex-offender. The vivid and perhaps shocking nature of these stories is likely to have a powerful impact.

　　在我看來，騷年們更喜歡接受有實踐經(jīng)歷的人來講道理。勞改犯可以告訴年輕人他們是如何參與到犯罪中去的，如何體驗危險的犯罪生活，和號子里面的真實情況。他們也可以打消一些年輕人覺得犯罪可以走向人生巔峰的無知念頭。一些年輕人對老人言其實還蠻冷漠的。我可以想象他們大部分還是超級想聽有犯罪前科人所講的故事。生動和可能恐怖的故事會更有說服力。

　　3.主體段：(第二個理由)：讓老師或警察來教育年輕人，不過這幾個效果不一定很好

　　The alternatives to using reformed criminals to educate teenagers about crime would be much less effective. One option would be for police officers to visit schools and talk to young people. This could be useful in terms of informing teens about what happens to lawbreakers when they are caught, but young people are often reluctant to take advice from figures of authority. A second option would be for school teachers to speak to their students about crime, but I doubt that students would see teachers as credible sources of information about this topic. Finally, educational films might be informative, but there would be no opportunity for young people to interact and ask questions.

　　另外一種讓勞改犯教育騷年的辦法可能就沒那么用了。一個選擇是讓警察去學校開講座教導騷年們。這個對于讓少年們知道關(guān)于觸犯法律被逮著之后會發(fā)生什么還是有點用的，不過年輕人對于權(quán)威的數(shù)據(jù)還是有那么點叛逆的。第二個選擇是學校老師告訴孩子們犯罪是什么，不過我并不覺得孩子們會把老師講的當做犯罪話題的重點信息來源。最終，教育類電影可能有丟丟用，不過這種讓孩子沒有了互動和提問的機會。

　　4.總結(jié)段：總結(jié)觀點

　　In conclusion, I fully support the view that people who have turned their lives around after serving a prison sentence could help to deter teenagers from committing crimes.

　　總之，我完全支持回歸社會的勞改犯們幫助減少青少年們犯罪。

　　(287 words, band 9)

　　必記改寫：

　　1.I completely agree with the idea that=I fully support the view that

　　2.become normal, productive members of society= turned their lives around

　　3.ex-prisoners=after serving a prison sentence

　　4.discourage them=deter teenagers

　　5.breaking the law=committing crimes