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雅思寫作提升的必經(jīng)之路-細化思維

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2016年08月06日

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消除語法錯誤,基本上能保證你的雅思大作文到6分,可是6分以后的雅思寫作之路,就開始了更艱難的旅程。因為要解決另外一個很核心的問題,就是細化思維的問題。通過細化思維來將題目進行有邏輯的流暢展開,并且的確是展開話題用的,是寫作得分的關(guān)鍵。

當(dāng)考官看到類似,萬能開頭:With the development of...的時候,想必一定會皺眉頭。 “也許只有中國人會用吧。那為什么像類似的開篇:with the development of society and economy, there are more and more//increasing number of //, the topic is a hotly-debated one, which arose our passion towards the…, 然后再寫一波大的背景,然后開始寫作文切入的話題,這種思路嚴重破壞了雅思作文的評分標準(CC) 連貫性的問題。所以作文的開篇就必須要是直接切入話題(通過細化思維的描述,然后表明自己的觀點即可。)

中文追求高語境文化容易宏觀化一些概念,也就是很大很空的話,類似于“新聞聯(lián)播”的發(fā)言稿。高中的作文的時候,寫的越大,不接地氣,越云里霧里的文章,越能拿高分。這些華麗的軀殼并沒有嚴謹?shù)倪壿嫛K约毣季S的訓(xùn)練是非常重要的訓(xùn)練,這個也可以從很多劍橋雅思后面的范文中可以看到。

所以英文寫作一定要細,要寫清楚。有多細呢?我舉個例子。比如一篇金錢和幸福的關(guān)系,優(yōu)秀的英文邏輯就是:“有了錢我可以買車,有了車生活會更方便,生活方便了我的幸福指數(shù)就會提高。”無懈可擊的邏輯,perfect!然而中國人有可能會這樣寫:"Being rich could boost one's materialistic happiness. Moreover, it could..."語法單詞基本都沒問題,但是寫了等于沒寫。。。什么是materialistic happiness?我們都知道中文是物質(zhì)幸福,看似也很高大上。然而西方人的人腦回路是無法直接get到的。。你必須要clarify it。這些所謂很好并且很復(fù)雜的想法并不足以說清楚這些觀點。所以大家要記得要將自己的理性和智商同步下降,這樣才能達到英國人的水平和高度。

舉例說明如下:

細化思維的訓(xùn)練中文擅長把一個抽象的問題變得更抽象,以大見更大;英文擅長把一個抽象的問題變得具體化

例子一: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

4.5分的思維: Nowdays (竟然有人少寫了個 a) ,with society develops, advertisements plays a more and more important role in modern society.

5.5分的思維: Nowadays, with the development of society and economy, advertisements play a more and more important role in modern society. Some people said they are helpful to give us much information while others do not think so. From my perspective, I think ….

6.5分的思維: Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the streets. While someone doubt the usefulness and value of advertisements, I still believe it is a positive trend with overt benefits.

7.5分的思維: Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the billboards. Some people think that the advertising boosts the sales of goods and it encourages people to buy things unnecessarily. These arguments may be true. In my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous and popular actors or singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that their favorite singer advertise, although they do not really need the products.

8.5分的思維: Nowadays, no matter where you get around in a city or even in the countryside, it is pretty easy for you to find one or two billboards introducing products in the streets. Some people think that advertising boosts the sales of goods and encourages people to buy things they do not necessarily need. This argument contains some truth. In my country, advertising companies often produce advertisements featuring popular actors or singers to induce people, especially youngsters, to acquire goods which their favorite actor or singer seems to endorse, whether they need the products or not..

細化訓(xùn)練(例子二) In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

4.5---5 分的思維

It is a well-acknowledged that studying is not easy. Along with many benefits also comes negative aspects. We should look at both side before reaching a conclusion about whether working a year bring more benefits or more problems.

5.5—6分的思維

Nowadays, the ways to educate the youth become increasingly significant in such a competitive society. The opinion that teenagers could have a year free from school for traveling and work arouse a heated debate. Although there are both pros and cons for the question, ,my view is that teenagers who are 10 something to 20 something could have their own choice to decide where to learn and how to learn.

6分的思維

It is hard for young people to make the decision on whether they should work or travel before starting university studies. Some consider it is an excellent chance for them to practice themselves while others believe that it will produce adverse effects on their life.

6.5-7分的思維

Thanks to the gap year, nowadays high school graduates can be highly praised by their strong abilities. While many young people are in favor of the attempt, older generation tends to hold conservative attitudes. Personally, I believe different types of media have their respective merits.

It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time.


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