六級(jí)高分作文_摒棄膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘勇敢的一面

　摒棄膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘勇敢的一面

Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief description of the picture and then explain its intended meaning and state what it may teach you in terms of your life . You should write at least 150 words but no more than 200 words.

審題立意

1. 導(dǎo)語解讀：要求考生簡要描述圖畫內(nèi)容，闡釋圖畫的意義并陳述自己從中學(xué)到了什么。

2. 漫畫解讀：圖中一個(gè)人正被“膽怯”的自己和“勇敢”的自己揪扯著，顯然他處于一種內(nèi)心糾結(jié)的狀態(tài)。在三張表情迥異的面孔上方有一行引自弗蘭克的注解文字——“如果你是弱者，你自己乃是你最大的敵人；如果你是勇者，你自己乃是你最佳之友人。”

3. 文章立意：每個(gè)人都有“膽怯”的一面,也都有“勇敢”的一面，遇到困難時(shí)需要做出選擇，此時(shí)人們的內(nèi)心常常會(huì)陷入痛苦的掙扎。如果“膽怯”戰(zhàn)勝“勇敢”，一個(gè)人將變成弱者，易失??；反之，則將變成強(qiáng)者，易成功。因此，人們應(yīng)該采取“摒棄膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘勇敢的一面”的態(tài)度來對(duì)待人生。

寫作思路

1. 第一段簡要描述漫畫及注解文字，然后提出論點(diǎn)：摒棄膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘勇敢的一面。

2. 第二段通過對(duì)比論證的方式闡述選擇做“勇敢”的自我較之做“膽怯”的自我會(huì)讓生活變得更加美好：膽怯的人畏懼困難，害怕失敗，不敢嘗試，容易錯(cuò)失機(jī)遇，加之除了困難本身，他自己成了最大的障礙，則弱者更弱；而勇敢的人不畏懼困難，大膽接受挑戰(zhàn)，善于把握機(jī)遇，則強(qiáng)者更強(qiáng)。

3. 第三段呼應(yīng)文章論點(diǎn)，再次強(qiáng)調(diào)“摒棄膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘勇敢的一面”是一種積極的人生態(tài)度，更容易讓自己看到生活的美好。

參考范文

As is depicted in the picture, a man is tussling with two of his selves: one is called timidity, and the other is called courage. Above his struggling faces, there is a famous saying by Frank who suggested that, “You are your greatest enemy if you are a coward; but if you are brave, you are your greatest friend.” 1 According to his wisdom, we can tell that we should abandon the timid side of ourselves and explore the courageous one. 2

Firstly 3 , timid people refuse to make an attempt for fear of failures, which will result in missing opport-unities to development. Secondly 3 , they have to overcome the inner barrier before solving the real problem, which is like an evil enemy hindering them from achieving success. However 4 , courageous people, never afraid of failures, are pleased to take up any challenges. In addition 3 , without the negative psychological influence, it would be as though they had a good friend who would give them a big hand.

All in all, we will definitely taste more happiness of life only if we abandon the timid self and explore the courageous one in us. 5

如圖所示，一個(gè)人正在與另外的兩個(gè)自己拉扯：一個(gè)叫做“膽怯”，而另一個(gè)叫做“勇敢”。在他糾結(jié)的表情上方，有一句出自弗蘭克的至理名言：“如果你是弱者，你自己乃是你最大的敵人；如果你是勇者，你自己乃是你最佳之友人?！睆乃木湮覀兛梢哉J(rèn)識(shí)到，我們應(yīng)該摒棄自己膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘自己勇敢的一面。

首先，懦弱的人因?yàn)楹ε率《芙^嘗試，這會(huì)使得他們錯(cuò)失發(fā)展的機(jī)遇。其次，在解決實(shí)際問題之前，他們不得不先克服自己的心理障礙，它就像是一個(gè)邪惡的敵人使他們無法取得成功。然而，勇敢的人從不懼怕失敗，他們樂于接受任何挑戰(zhàn)。另外，沒有消極心理的干擾，就如同多了一位將助你一臂之力的良友。

總而言之，只要我們摒棄自己膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘自己勇敢的一面，就一定會(huì)品嘗到生活中更多的快樂。

范文點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. 開篇簡要描述圖片的內(nèi)容，同時(shí)結(jié)合圖片上方的文字準(zhǔn)確傳達(dá)出這幅漫畫的寓意。

2. 首段末句明確表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)：我們應(yīng)摒棄自己膽怯的一面，發(fā)掘自己勇敢的一面。

3. 分三個(gè)層次論證了自己的觀點(diǎn)，論據(jù)充分，論證有力。

4. 采用對(duì)比論證，恰如其分，同時(shí)也體現(xiàn)了論證方法的多樣性。

5. 末段總結(jié)全文，重申觀點(diǎn)。

要點(diǎn)用法

tussle v. 扭打

timidity n. 膽怯

courage n. 勇敢

wisdom n. 有見識(shí)的想法、說法等

explore v. 探究，發(fā)掘

barrier n. 障礙

give a big hand 幫大忙

句法點(diǎn)評(píng)

1. In addition, without the negative psychological influence, it would be as though they had a good friend who would give them a big hand.

without..., it would be...這句話屬于非真實(shí)條件句。這種暗含的條件從句叫做含蓄條件句，又如：Without your instruction, I would not have made such great progress. 要是沒有你的指導(dǎo)，我不會(huì)取得如此大的進(jìn)步。

2. All in all, we will definitely taste the happiness of life only if we abandon the timid self and explore the courageous one in us.

only if意思是“只要……就；只有，只有當(dāng)……”。if only意思是“只要……就好了；但愿”。在使用時(shí)，兩者易發(fā)生混淆。例如：①You can make progress only if you are modest. 唯虛心乃能進(jìn)步。②If only you had told me that some time before. 要是你早些時(shí)候告訴我該多好??！