2014年大學英語六級考試寫作專項訓練5

　　

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic How Should College Students Relieve Pressure? You should write at least 150 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:

　　1)當今的大學生要面臨很多來自不同方面的壓力

　　2)大學生緩解壓力的方式有…

　　3)你一般都是如何排解壓力的?

　　How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?

　　行文思路

　　本題屬于提綱式文字命題。提綱第1點指出一個問題，提綱第2點要求說明如何解決該問題，提綱第3點要求闡述“我”的做法，由此可判斷本文應為問題解決型作文。

　　根據(jù)所給提綱，本文應包含如下內(nèi)容：指出當今的大學生主要面臨哪些壓力;列舉大學生緩解壓力的方式;談談“我”是采取哪種方式排解壓力的。

　　高分范文

　　How Should College Students Relieve Pressure?

　　Today’s college students face many pressures, mainly from parents’ expectation, study, economy, employment and all kinds of competition. [1]Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect. Pressure can destroy a student’s confidence. [2]More seriously, it might make some students lose control of their emotions and behaviors.

　　[3]Considering the great damage of overdue pressure, college students should learn to how to relieve pressure. [2]First, we should have a right evaluation of ourselves [4]so as to [5]make use of advantages and avoid disadvantages. [2]Second, we should [6]set a clear aim of a struggle. The aim can give us motivation, and make us become active. [2]Third, [7]attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve pressure. [2]Finally, if you find pressure is nearly [8]beyond your control, you’d better turn to professional psychological guidance.

　　[2]As to me, my pressure is mainly from future employment. [4]In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages, and produce a more practical job objection. [2]So my employment pressure was relieved greatly. Now I become confident in my future, and I [9]do believe I can get an ideal job after my graduation.

　　【亮點點評】

　　[1]although引導讓步狀語從句。

　　[2]過渡銜接詞語，使文章條理清晰、銜接緊密。

　　[3]“考慮到，鑒于”，介詞。

　　[4]表示目的。

　　[5]“揚長避短”。

　　[6]“設立一個明確的奮斗目標”。

　　[7]動名詞短語作主語，用不同于前兩點的句式提出緩解壓力的第三種方式。

　　[8]“超出…范圍或能力”。

　　[9]強調(diào)動詞believe。

　　佳句臨摹

　　1.佳句：Although pressure to some extent can provide motivation, overdue pressure has a serious negative effect.

　　臨?。罕M管兼職工作能夠帶來很多好處，但我們不應該在它上面花費太多的時間。

　　2.佳句：Attending collective activities is an effective way to relieve

　　臨?。簩W會如何與人溝通是步入社會的第一步也是最重要的一步。

　　3.佳句：In order to reduce it, I asked my parents help me analyse my advantages and disadvantages

　　臨?。?為了在激烈的競爭中獲得優(yōu)勢，大學生們必須全面發(fā)展自己的能力。

　　【KEY】

　　1. Although a part-time job does much good to us, we should not spend too much time on it.

　　2. Learning how to deal with people is the first and the most important step to enter into the society.

　　3. In order to get their priority in the fierce competition, college students have to develop their abilities in an all-around way.